Wikipedia:Vague introductions
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A vague introduction is an article lead (WP:LEAD) that begins with non-definitive or otherwise equivocal language, such that only reveals and discusses a concept's ambiguities or peculiarities, rather than its actual substance.
Examples of the wording in such introductions often resemble the form:
- "There is no clear definition of [subject]..."
- "There is no one agreed upon definition of [subject]."
- "Experts do not all agree upon a definition of [subject]..."
- "[Subject] has many definitions"
Philosophy articles are particularly susceptible to such vague language for several reasons:
- Editors in philosophical subjects may be too polarized to find an agreeable definition
- The concepts are typically designed to be abstract and therefore are too often misunderstood to begin with.
- Editors in philosophical subjects seek to preserve or amplify known ambiguities rather than attempt to resolve them
The solution may require having separate leads for each major meaning assigned to the topic, rather than using a Cuisinart and blending all the concepts into one paragraph. The most dominant meaning should be given the first paragraph, but no significant usage should be completely omitted from the new lead.
(Almost) content-free leads
A variant of the "vague lead" is a lead in which editors have removed all examples from the lead, so that the lead describes the topic in such a generalized way that the reader gains little information about the topic and gets no information about the most important thinkers, bands, or organizations that are associated with the topic. Sometimes this is done to avoid edit wars and accusations of giving "undue weight" to specific thinkers or organizations associated with the topic.
- In this first example below, which is a "vague lead" or an almost "content-free lead", the editors of the article on the "Foo subculture", a fictional punk subculture, have avoided giving any specific information about the "Foo subculture". While this does ensure that the lead does not give undue weight to any examples, it also fails to help the reader get a good understanding of the Foo subculture–what do the members look like? What are their political views? What are the leading bands in the Foo subculture?):
- This version below is arguably better, because it gives the reader more specific information about how Foo subculture members dress, the bands they listen to, their political views, philosophies and views on drug use (all references are fictional, for the sake of giving an example):