Wikipedia:Cleanup/Archive 2

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2009

August

Freddy Cole This article lacks a clear structure and contains unreferenced parts. Generally clumsy article. Mr Cole deserves better Paul210 (talk) 19:28, 30 August 2009 (UTC)
{{Area Code Box 0}} - May be informative, but it looks too less structured and too less formal
ArmA: Armed Assault - --Harmpie (talk) 03:16, 16 August 2009 (UTC)
Nizamani. -Reconsider the static (talk) 10:52, 10 August 2009 (UTC)
Syrian occupation of Lebanon - important topic, shitty article Sherurcij ^{(speaker for the dead)} 05:05, 28 August 2009 (UTC)
Saskia de Coster - bad language, some paragraphs make no sense at all -- Athenchen (talk) 06:01, 12 August 2010 (UTC)

July

London Buses route 492 Slightly 'bus-route fannish'
Rodolfo Valentin - survived AfD despite concerns of problematic referencing and a self-promotional tone. The article could use vigorous editing. Pastor Theo (talk) 12:05, 23 July 2009 (UTC)
Feres v. United States seems to have some conflicts with the information presented in articles related to a recent event. I've added additional information on the talk page, Talk:Feres_v._United_States. --Ultima Designs (talk) 04:14, 21 July 2009 (UTC)
CB radio in the United Kingdom - placed in AfD, even though the nominator felt it just needed merging or editing. The AfD closed as Keep, but the article remains and needs a good scrubbing. Pastor Theo (talk) 00:15, 2 July 2001 (UTC)
I know I just added an article that needs cleanup recently, but I found another. Comparison of Linux and Windows is a little hard to understand. Plus, there are at least nine citation needed tags on that page, some of which are from February of 2007. Also, I have found false information, which I will correct shortly, which claims that Linux has poor out of the box usability. This is only partially true, if at all, because there are several distributions. Ubuntu, the distribution I use, had great out of the box usability. Guess what? That statement had no citation. I have also seen claims of bias in the talk page, leaning both ways. That article would be a lot more informative if only it made more sense. EDIT: I will NOT be correcting that fact. Confusing context thwarts me yet again.Dullstar (talk) 09:17, 21 July 2009 (UTC)

Cindy Pawlcyn I wrote this article and want to clean it up but am having trouble understanding process. Any suggestions on how to clean it up would be very appreciated. Thanks annspivack

June

Le Palais des Thés - possible copying of advertising material.
metamaterial Incomprehensible to the person who wants to know what they are - the French intro is clearer.
Amorous Professor Cherry - Needs a complete rewrite. --65.31.110.13 (talk) 01:42, 10 June 2009 (UTC)
United States House of Representatives elections, 2010 - Needs grammar and punctuation fixing and elimination of some redundant phrasing. CylonCAG (talk) 17:29, 4 June 2009 (UTC)
Violence Against Women Act - relisting this article from 2007. Needs to be revised. lacks focus and contains a lot of unrelated information. See talk page for details. --Lendorien (talk) 14:41, 3 June 2009 (UTC)
Mimika Air Flight 514 - Article that justed passed afd. Still needs much cleanup. Highest Heights (talk) 15:54, 5 June 2009 (UTC)
Articles messed up on 18 February 2009 —Christian Campbell 07:21, 21 June 2009 (UTC)
Much of hydraulic power steering appears to have been written in a foreign language and automatically translated to English, with the resulting effect that the technical sections are almost completely unreadable: "In a neutral position section of the bores passing a liquid in the right and left part of the hydrocylinder, identical with section of bores issued a liquid from them in a tank. The pressure in the right and the left parts of the hydrocylinder is the same too" (???). I'm trying to fix up the grammar and make the sentences mean something, but my ability to do so is directly limited by my extreme ignorance of the subject matter (which is, of course, why I visited the page at first). Destynova (talk) 11:48, 25 June 2009 (UTC)

May

Omega Point (Tipler) Like the general reader, unfamiliar at this point with the theory and so unclear what relation (I suspect none) between heat death of brane and increasing computational capacity. Also, current physical evidence doesn't provide a path for the so-called big crunch so unclear if theory not therefore moot, has been adjusted, or what. Lycurgus (talk) 04:48, 30 May 2009 (UTC)
RMI-IIOP - Incomprehensible, possible copy-vio, needs proper intro, rewriting and sources. Another item listed a long time. Needs someone familiar with JAVA. --Lendorien (talk) 13:44, 29 May 2009 (UTC)
Whither Socialism? see history and talk. 72.228.150.44 (talk) 17:23, 26 May 2009 (UTC)
Every Castlevania page that has a Japanese title of Akumajō Dracula needs to be changed from Devil's Castle Dracula to Demon Castle Dracula. Tailikku (talk) 6:49, 21 May 2009 (UTC)
Weird Al Yankovic - This article is disorganized. Some of Yankovic's releases are mentioned in the chronology sections, while others are mentioned in the section just entitled "Music." This disorganization leaves readers unclear of where to look for information. I will try to fix it up to the best of my abilities. Anyone who wants to help is welcome. Bibbly Bob (talk) 22:44, 18 May 2009 (UTC)
Southern Illinois - Too long, does not verify hardly any sources, and needs heavy editing or rewriting. Also has an improper tone for it being a region, not an idea. Ruhe1986 (talk) 22:04, 15 May 2009 (UTC)
What's the Matter With Kansas - Written like an essay, too long Goatstein (talk) 20:02, 14 May 2009 (UTC)
Ransom_of_King_John_II_of_France - Article has been listed for years. Needs heavy editing for tone and content. Needs to be deorphaned and sourced. I've done a little work, giving it Wikiprojects and a decent intro. --Lendorien (talk) 16:38, 14 May 2009 (UTC)

An editor has done major edits for tone and content. Still needs more edits and sourcing, but it's a far sight better. --Lendorien (talk) 14:07, 22 May 2009 (UTC)

Rudolf Bahro - Possibly copy vio of a German publication that was bablefish translated. Needs heavy editing, and a proper intro. Been listed for 2 years. --Lendorien (talk) 15:06, 14 May 2009 (UTC)
The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock - Interpretative section is heavily OR and needs rewriting. Rest of article is pretty good. --Lendorien (talk) 16:58, 11 May 2009 (UTC)
Orgasm - Although "citations" exist at the bottom of the article, they are referenced almost nowhere in the text. Furthermore, the text is replete with examples of personal opinion, preference, anecdotes, etc. In short, the article is a meandering mess not worthy for inclusion in a legitimate publication.
Brute (song)- Pretty much nothing is on this article The Most Angry Pissed off Gaming Nerd 00:01, 11 May 2009 (UTC)

March

Symphonic black metal - This article has multiple issues.It doesn't have any citation,it contains original research and it's more like a personal essay.--Solino _{the Wolf} 22:40, 31 March 2009 (UTC)
Hull House - The section on the neighborhood is full of redundancies and the citations could be cleaned up a bit throughout the article. Shsilver (talk) 19:40, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Samuel Zimmerman - This article is long and confusing, and needs to be cleaned up (perhaps written in simpler form). --Kyuko (talk) 03:41, 29 March 2009 (UTC)
Fourier optics - This is an important topic, but it is utterly confusing for the layman. The intro is completely inaccessible and the article is even worse. Definitely needs to be rewritten in plain language. See talk page for details. More editors on this article would be helpful. tagged for 2 years. --Lendorien (talk) 14:33, 23 March 2009 (UTC)
Christianity in Haiti - chaotic jumble of facts and ideas with the germ of an acceptable article buried somewhere within. Not a subject I know anything about but it clearly needs help. andy (talk) 08:44, 20 March 2009 (UTC)
United States civil service - this used to just forward to one of the laws that reformed civil service in US, so I dropped some information that was from other pages on Wikipedia (see talk page), but it needs severe help and writeup. It really needs lots of sources, and reorganization Jonverve (talk) 23:00, 12 March 2009 (UTC)
Open market operations Are the accounts of the private banks credited or debited when they buy the (presumably government) financial instruments? The lede sentence is ambiguous about the precise relations but implicitly states (given the context provided by the prior lede text) that when a private bank sells a government security its account is credited and when it buys one it is debited. 71.186.170.112 (talk) 05:12, 11 March 2009 (UTC)
Pasquale Marino - Not enough quality/quantity for such a prestigious figure in Italian football, also some disorganised pieces of article that needs a bit of polishing up.
Ranger's Apprentice (series) - Needs major work. Possibly several merges, rewriting, reorganization, sourcing, etc. See talk page for details. More editors tackle this the better. --Lendorien (talk) 17:11, 2 March 2009 (UTC)
Blue Lagoon Island - Unreferenced; tone editing, fact check. Orphan. See talk page. --Lendorien (talk) 17:00, 3 March 2009 (UTC)
Evangel University- This is about a University found in Springfield Missouri. The article reads like a guide or advertisement and needs to be improved. There are no details of campus life, courses offered or other information. Article is also based on one source. Also there is a possiable point of view issue or issues.Magnum Serpentine (talk) 11:59, 4 March 2009 (UTC)
Caliph - The article has several extra sections after the External Links section - probably the result of a merge attempt. I raised the issue on the talk page back in Nov 2008, but nothing got done so I've added a couple of cleanup tags to try to get things going. Unfortunately, I lack expertise in the subject matter so I'm hoping someone with a background in Islamic Studies or something similar will help out. Astronaut (talk) 17:25, 6 March 2009 (UTC)
Panoramic photography - This article needs many citations, and needs a thorough copy-edit to make it readable. It's not my specialism so I'm unwilling to assert much 'expertise' here. Thanks. Baffle gab1978 (talk) 08:00, 8 March 2009 (UTC)
Perry Kramer - I very much prefer removing things from this list to adding them, but this one is beyond my ability. The format makes my head hurt but I don't know the subject (not to mention most of the formatting code) well enough to know how to rearrange things. Yikes! -- edi(talk) 20:43, 30 March 2009 (UTC)

Hmmm... almost exactly the same situation for Shawn Texas. Am I missing something? Is this an acceptable format for athletes? -- edi(talk) 14:43, 31 March 2009 (UTC)

Also almost exactly the same case with Stu Thomsen--it appears to be related to a specific editor's style, and I suspect most of that editor's articles on the topic may look similar and may therefore also need some degree of cleanup... Unless this is the established format for athletes--or cyclists in particular--but I'm not so sure that's the case. Tehae (talk) 00:07, 23 October 2009 (UTC)

February

Money states that currency is the dominant form of money when the opposite is the case, non-currency money, even at the level of base national aggregates such as M1 far outweighs anything that could be called currency (within any boundaries based on current usage) as distinct from general money. Lycurgus (talk) 00:17, 25 February 2009 (UTC)
Bat Boy: The Musical - I've done some major revisions, but the Synopsis section desperately needs to be condensed and rewritten by someone more bold than I. Some sourcing needed too. --Lendorien (talk) 21:54, 23 February 2009 (UTC)
List of the youngest mayors in the United_States - needs cleanup and needs administrator to have a look on the accuracy of the youngest mayor of Elkhart, Indiana. User --User talk:Mayorofrosharon 04:48, 22 February 2009 (UTC)
Alice Academy - Article on a Japanese anime. Messy and unwikified. Needs to be looked over by an anime viewer as well as general cleanup (listed on and off since 2006) --Lendorien (talk) 16:01, 10 February 2009 (UTC)
Humanity Declaration - Weasel worded accusation based on laughable inference that because they observe Shinto rites the Japanese monarch(s) reaffirm their "mythical" status. 72.228.150.44 (talk) 02:46, 14 February 2009 (UTC)
John_L._Merkt - Listed for about 6 months. Article is an orphan and needs some addition fact checking. May not be notable. Possible candidate for deletion? --Lendorien (talk) 16:30, 4 February 2009 (UTC)
Photographic developer - dense and waffly text, reading it is like wading through treacle; few refs. Needs expert attention and good referencing. Baffle gab1978 (talk) 19:31, 17 February 2009 (UTC)
Samokov - Needs reliable sources and copyedit. The Rolling Camel (talk) 10:54, 5 February 2009 (UTC)
Fekry Abaza general clean up.-Binary TSO ^???

Have cleaned this page up; still in need of more citations. Esowteric | Talk 17:56, 15 July 2009 (UTC)

Heavy Metal 2000 - Plot is unfinished, needs work. 20 February 2009

January

Ski Jumping - A catastrophically written article that also lacks sources as well as info. The Rolling Camel (talk) 16:12, 20 January 2009 (UTC)
Antonin Hajek - Needs a copyedit, more info and sources. The Rolling Camel (talk) 21:39, 22 January 2009 (UTC)
Risk society - Needs to be rewritten. Has an essay tone. Has some souring, but it needs to be normalized into footnotes. Proper into needs to be written. See talk page for more details. --Lendorien (talk) 16:33, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
List of high schools in Indiana - Needs to uses consistent tables throughout. It's a patchwork mess of no tables, different types of tables, etc. --Lendorien (talk) 20:00, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
Colin Calderwood - Probably an easy fix. Needs to be checked over for non-nuetral superlatives ("Rock at the heart fo the defense", "Horror tackle", etc.) and general text edits. --Lendorien (talk) 17:55, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
Route poisoning - Has been identified as inaccurate and as an ophan, this article has barely been touched since its creation in 2005. Desperately needs attention to deorphan it and correct the errors. Has been posted on the computing WP. --Lendorien (talk) 17:29, 9 January 2009 (UTC)
Thai_lunar_calendar - I've done a lot of work on this long time listed article. Needs a look-over by another editor, preferably one who has some knowledge of how to format articles that use foreign languages heavily. Also needs to be checked for clarity.--Lendorien (talk) 16:58, 7 January 2009 (UTC)
SEIKIMA-II - Needs some significant cleanup. Lacks section headings, needs to eb wikified. See talk page for more details.—Lendorien (talk) 15:19, 6 January 2009 (UTC)
The Krypton Factor — May require page splits, more citations, more information, rewording and perhaps expert attention. --Marianian (talk) 10:24, 7 January 2009 (UTC)

Jesus in Ahmadiyya Islam – After Merge and new structure (captions) the article needs to be rewritten. --Ahmadi (talk) 11:37, 29 January 2009 (UTC)
Kresnik (deity) ~~Large part of this article is my translation of article from slovenian wikipedia sl:Kresnik (bog) . Please check up the language style.~~ --Bostjan46 (talk) 14:33, 30 January 2011 (UTC)